books and bad ideas (first edit)

[peacejazzspirit]

What an interesting poem. It's unique, or at least to me, I've never seen one quite like it, like the page numbers... I agree with ellajam, it grabbed me and got more exciting when you started introducing the Snicket, Poe, etc. stories at which point they had a big impact; however if I hadn't read them, the impact wouldn't have been as great. On page 385, in the lines: "I love you/I miss you/we need to stop hurting each other", I think you could write them in a more unique, less cliche way... especially so to match the depth of the lines proceeding them.

Great poem, and good luck editing!