September

[Alexearth]

The line breaks look more interesting on this phone's standard view, but yours aren't horrible. I might can say more about that when I get to a computer. I think tender is a nice word for that light, almost simple. The third line makes sense with me, but also seems the most questionable, though it's not horrible either. I like everything after the semicolon. The hectic yet lazy summer steam and tension caressing into fall. That's how it feels to me.

Thank you for your message Rowens. I'm wondering, what line breaks did you read the poem with, and also what line breaks would you had put?


Alex