09-22-2015, 10:29 PM
(09-22-2015, 03:51 PM)chriskarnold3 Wrote: I really enjoy the dichotomy between the brightness of the sun rising and the "brightness" of the darkness in everyone's hearts. You paint an excellent picture of both of these things, and it's an excellent first draft.Hi, Chris, welcome to the pen. If you think it's an excellent first draft can I assume you think an edit would improve it? It would be helpful if you can explain why. Thanks, ella/mod
billy wrote:welcome to the site. make it your own, wear it like a well loved slipper and wear it out. ella pleads:please click forum titles for posting guidelines, important threads. New poet? Try Poetic DevicesandWard's Tips