09-22-2015, 04:20 AM
How was I to know
of all faces
yours would be misplaced
in a terror show
You could get rid of all the punctuation until you know how it works. Maybe 'the' or 'this' terror show. Or leave 'a' as it is.
How could I think
walking away
is letting go
You could lose words here and there.
Wasn't how I was taught,
How tough the folds,
become now that
The distance isn't as distant,
When I knew I was bold,
How comparable,
the shores of lands
Harbors once grand
And plentiful,
How their ports dry one season,
And became a dream
of man's greater comprise,
And broken comprehenions,
But if their was one thing,
They would say,
And we knew it,
We could have saved the day.
Now the tide is of their illusion,
And so the ship's,
And so the man.
And we, too.
Tamper with it, losing punctuation and unnecessary words, reword, and add words if any strike you. Right now it seems like a case of trying to say something in a poetic way in a language you aren't used to speaking in.
of all faces
yours would be misplaced
in a terror show
You could get rid of all the punctuation until you know how it works. Maybe 'the' or 'this' terror show. Or leave 'a' as it is.
How could I think
walking away
is letting go
You could lose words here and there.
Wasn't how I was taught,
How tough the folds,
become now that
The distance isn't as distant,
When I knew I was bold,
How comparable,
the shores of lands
Harbors once grand
And plentiful,
How their ports dry one season,
And became a dream
of man's greater comprise,
And broken comprehenions,
But if their was one thing,
They would say,
And we knew it,
We could have saved the day.
Now the tide is of their illusion,
And so the ship's,
And so the man.
And we, too.
Tamper with it, losing punctuation and unnecessary words, reword, and add words if any strike you. Right now it seems like a case of trying to say something in a poetic way in a language you aren't used to speaking in.