Meditation

[Wjames]

You wrote:  

I really like the idea of playing with the "Premeditated" murder thing....

Wj-
Then how about titling this one "Premeditating".  It would help tie the end back to the title, and provide its own, possibly murderous, definition of "premeditating"... Just add pre- and -ing...

,,, Mark

I like the idea of someone contemplating/envisioning a murder being a form of meditation/stress-relief. Everyone (I hope, or else I'm a violent brute) has thought at one point or another, "I want to kill him!" when particularly annoyed, or upset with someone.

That's the main thing I want to get across with this one. I think the title sort of connecting to "premeditated" is just a nice extra layer to the thing.

If I changed the title to "premeditated" I think it would make people read the poem more literally as just being about murder, and not about the stress relief (or, form of meditation) such thoughts can be.

Thanks reading and commenting Mark, more thoughts are always useful.