Glide Comes Before The Fall (title change, edit #1)

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Edit posted. I have stolen a bit from each of you, humbly grateful. I'm not sure about losing "close space" or about the title (I considered Snap, Crackle, Plop   ).

As always, all crit welcomed and cherished.

Snap, crackle, plop   .  The title Glide Comes Before The Fall is good, I think.  The edit reads beautifully.  The only slight stumble when reading aloud, was in the second line, where, unless I pause after climb, the stress falls on the to of onto:  I climb onto my wooden perch. But it's probably just me, so maybe ignore?  Anyway, I love this poem. Grace.

Thanks so much for reading, Grace. I'm hearing I climb onto my wooden perch. I often place a stumbling block that I can't hear, we'll wait and see if anyone else chimes in. Thinking now, it should be onto, I've forced it to my liking. Thanks, Grace, I'll think on a fix.