The world breaks everyone

[RiverNotch]

The world breaks everyone

I walked through the woods
To St. James infirmary St. James Infirmary Blues? If so, I read it has many versions -- which one? Otherwise, why "St. James"?
And spent the night
With my cool and clean baby Two lines reinforce the reference. Nice, nice.
Till the worms started feeding on the roots. And then a good bit of this. I wonder...
 
Outside,
        The trees waved their black roots
        Mourned their miscarried fruits
        Choked six feet deep
        In the rich dirt. This, I think, is a good example of no punctuation, because it's easy to understand so, and the rhythm would suffer if not. The waving roots are a weird image once seen (I used that in a poem once, and a friend so commented -- and I found myself thinking so soon enough), but it could work here -- I hope you did not mean to conjure "fallen fruits" by "miscarried", because the associations of "miscarried" with pregnancies -- an unclear point: though choking six feet deep is good, I can't tell who's choking.
 
We could see it all
Naked in the infirmary bed
And we smiled and stuck
Our roots
Would not break I don't think the lack of punctuation (the lack of distinction) is here really effective. I just got really annoyed by the double use of roots there, as it seemed like a grammatical error more than anything, while, well, where the hell did you stick the roots in? And so, fix this whole chunk of text, and punctuate -- and, since you seem to be talking about steam here, maybe add some more humps?
We would not break
We would not-
Break. And what's the point of the repetition here? I get the break, but the repetition just makes the break part seem like a trifle. Remove the first "We would not break".
And we were
Very brave
And very strong
And very gentle
And the worms fed on the roots
And then the fruits. Tiny but important note: your wee metaphor seems wildly inconsistent from real life. Why would worms go for the generally harder to get (I mean, wood!) roots first, rather than the fallen fruits? And don't tell me you meant not the miscarried fruits here -- they were the only ones mentioned existing, even if the implication was there. And overall point: you know, with the image of the infirmary, the root worms, and the miscarried fruits, I was really hoping for something that had, well, slightly more hotness, and much more horror; but no.