To Lick Glass

[Mark A Becker]

Hello KAX-

See my in-line comments, please.

To Lick Glass enticing title

I licked the frosted glass to make it clearer. This line confused the hell outta me, I'm afraid. I can actually see it, but it looks comical, but I get the feeling "To Lick Glass" is not a funny poem
As glass cleared away I saw the world dearer, Wait a minute. Read it to yourself, "as glass cleared away" . Wouldn't it be the frost that cleared away??
and it saw me. I know it's not the glass that saw you. Will I get a clue??
I traded privacy
to taste frost you can no longer see. OK, I follow you... but where are we going? This line is pointing in a very obscure direction. I still don't know what "saw me"

I traded my bare naked corpse, TIME OUT!! When did you die??
in return, I saw another's. Oh man, I'm really getting lost now,,,
A fleshy thing, to be sure. Now a "musical" line ????
But I could only taste love another TIME OUT! This is getting too abstract...
if her tongue found a cove found a what?? a "cove?? I'm falling away fast... real fast
with me along.  Then we'd ... away and away, I'm falling...
be happy together- But,
we'd both be naked. I've fallen too far away for this line to have anything but comical impact. I'm sorry. Your poem. My eyes. Big dis-connect on this one.

I tried KAX. I did. But you ushered me into abstraction and left me naked on a busy street, waiting for the bus.... Perhaps someone else will feel differently, but I gotta tell ya straight.

... Mark