09-07-2015, 08:23 PM
No, it's not total trash, but....
Sometimes people have an idea, a good one, maybe worth a sonnet-thing poem, but they inflate it, until it becomes v thin. You have done the opposite: a great number of ideas - all vivid - but not really going far. There are, I think, several poems, or seeds of poems, in there, trying to escape. Some serious midwifery is called for! Your final lines suggest you have an inkling of this. Good luck if you decide to stick with the writing theme !
Sometimes people have an idea, a good one, maybe worth a sonnet-thing poem, but they inflate it, until it becomes v thin. You have done the opposite: a great number of ideas - all vivid - but not really going far. There are, I think, several poems, or seeds of poems, in there, trying to escape. Some serious midwifery is called for! Your final lines suggest you have an inkling of this. Good luck if you decide to stick with the writing theme !