09-07-2015, 05:45 PM
Hi PJS. I like your passion for expression, but felt I had to comment on:
1. Fishermen don't write in the sand with fish hooks, in my experience. A keen fisherman would never risk damaging his tool like that.
2. Hunters don't shoot sparrows. Bullets are too expensive. Mostly they're netted.
3. Your protagonist is very one-eyed about writing. ;-)
1. Fishermen don't write in the sand with fish hooks, in my experience. A keen fisherman would never risk damaging his tool like that.
2. Hunters don't shoot sparrows. Bullets are too expensive. Mostly they're netted.
3. Your protagonist is very one-eyed about writing. ;-)