09-06-2015, 04:57 PM
I never said "unappreciated", I said "underappreciated". But, I will alter the title to a more fitting one. Editorial mistake. Thanks.
"entrails of the clouds" was the water which poured forth from them. I tend to think of entrails as something more, well, entrail-y, ie solid, but I guess that could work.
I understand what you mean with the last line, but something palpable doesn't have to be material. Tension could be palpable; excitement could be palpable; able to be sensed or easily felt, I didn't mean it in a materialistic way. I have a hard time ending things, so I'll work on it. I know, but the usage of palpable in those cases means that they're so intense as to be almost touchable, and since you're talking about a rainstorm, the rejuvenation it brings at the most immediate level is already literally palpable: it's sort of like saying "this cat is like a cat", a redundant metaphor (or something. I bet there's a proper term for this), at least in my mind.
"entrails of the clouds" was the water which poured forth from them. I tend to think of entrails as something more, well, entrail-y, ie solid, but I guess that could work.
I understand what you mean with the last line, but something palpable doesn't have to be material. Tension could be palpable; excitement could be palpable; able to be sensed or easily felt, I didn't mean it in a materialistic way. I have a hard time ending things, so I'll work on it. I know, but the usage of palpable in those cases means that they're so intense as to be almost touchable, and since you're talking about a rainstorm, the rejuvenation it brings at the most immediate level is already literally palpable: it's sort of like saying "this cat is like a cat", a redundant metaphor (or something. I bet there's a proper term for this), at least in my mind.