08-31-2015, 08:05 PM
Hi Mark,
overall very nice and although all of these are unfamiliar scenes, I feel that they still manage to relate and speak to me so job well done.
I know this is not a crit / comment section as such, but did wonder what a funnel cake was (we have fennel cake in UK so did wonder if it was a typoequally could be a regional cake thing. Just interested as much as anything)
The only stumble for me was I felt like I wanted a further commar after this the road on the first line.
Thanks for posting really enjoyed the read. The last couplet in particular was class. Highly evocotive and is easily accesable to anyone / anywhere.
AJ.
overall very nice and although all of these are unfamiliar scenes, I feel that they still manage to relate and speak to me so job well done.
I know this is not a crit / comment section as such, but did wonder what a funnel cake was (we have fennel cake in UK so did wonder if it was a typoequally could be a regional cake thing. Just interested as much as anything)
The only stumble for me was I felt like I wanted a further commar after this the road on the first line.
Thanks for posting really enjoyed the read. The last couplet in particular was class. Highly evocotive and is easily accesable to anyone / anywhere.
AJ.