08-18-2015, 04:45 AM
(08-17-2015, 06:13 PM)Leanne Wrote: Do you want dead and gone away or dead or gone away? If it's the former, it seems you're pushing too many words in for the rhyme, and bordering on cliche. Otherwise, this is poignant with a solid rhythm that dwindles quite perfectly.I want dead and gone away...you wanna fight?
Seriously, though, folks...the idea of "dead" as an optional state of "not being around" is interesting to me. Sometimes "dead" still has an implicit and pathetic (original if not aboriginal ) meaning in that there are two stages to death..hence "...he is dead and gone".
Visting the old place haunts one with the disturbing thought that if you see no one you know they could be dead, or gone away... or just stayed inside that day. After a few hours of walking the old streets, throwing stones in the river and hugging a tree without one familiar face or fleeting recognition you are drawn inevitably to the conclusion that they are all dead...and gone away.
Huh? Huh?
Best and thanks. Terse verse stinks OK?
tectak