08-17-2015, 03:38 PM
Thanks for the comments, everyone. I nearly put this at the end of The Pike in response to ella, just to see if I could get the metre and structure going, then thought it would confuse the issue.
The points raised - capitals, starting with conjunctions, punctuation - were genuine, so wrote the piece around that. Apart from the fun poem in the practice section (exercises in iamb), this really was the first written attempt (although listening and reading comprehension in poetry night-classes thirty years ago undoubtedly helped with the iambs.)
Many thanks again for the positive input. Appreciated.
The points raised - capitals, starting with conjunctions, punctuation - were genuine, so wrote the piece around that. Apart from the fun poem in the practice section (exercises in iamb), this really was the first written attempt (although listening and reading comprehension in poetry night-classes thirty years ago undoubtedly helped with the iambs.)
Many thanks again for the positive input. Appreciated.
A poet who can't make the language sing doesn't start. Hence the shortage of real poems amongst the global planktonic field of duds. - Clive James.