The Pike

[John]

Your poem took me straight into the moat, with Merlin and Arthur (Wart) and the King Pike. (The Once and Future King) Your pike also portrays strength, and a sense of evil that comes from power. You've already had good advice about rhyme, and I noticed that you maintain meter well, throughout the poem. I agree that the title should be a stronger hook. A stronger ending is a good idea too. It just tails away at the moment, fin-ishes low on the scale of closure. Thanks for the read, I enjoyed!

Many thanks for your input, jm. And nicking the rest of the puns. You've pect(oral) the best. Caud(al) have left some for me, adipose.  

I'm going to rework this and see how it looks in sonnet form.

Cheers again.