59º North August Presence

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Lovely imagery, Mark.  Noctilucent is a gorgeous word, packing so much information into so few syllables.  For some reason I kind of want the will-o-the-wisps to be taking over the skies, but they're probably not...

Thanks Leanne, I know what you mean about them taking over the skies and I haven't really managed to convey the size that the clouds appear and how they can seem to dominate a part of the sky. Zenith is really just straight above the observer and so not descriptive enough. I'm kind of struggling to think of a way of how to describe that space in the sky, I may perhaps use a couple of the constellations as pointers.

Also, I should say, I've changed the title because the previous title '59 Degrees North, August' could easily be mistaken for a boring weather forecast as opposed to a reference to a specific latitude which was the intention.

Thanks for your comments,

Mark

Although noctilucent is so lovely it makes a great title the change makes its use in the poem superfluous. For me the original title did a good job of pinpointing a particular time and location.

I have to say I took the poem as a meteor shower, maybe because it was a meteor night here. I didn't get the clouds at all, I didn't google because noctilucent made sense in my impression, I think the nocti read night to me when clouds aren't as visible, I never got there.