Sitting Shiva

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Cousin. Your use (or not) of punctuation and uppercase letters is a distraction. It almost seems too chaotic to be unintentional. In my limited experience, the more often a reader has to go back a line or two to clarify their understanding, the less likely it is they will ever be bothered to get to the end. I do enjoy the feel of disjointedness in the poem, but for now it is weighed down by the punctuation, not accentuated by it. Your other option of course is to use no punctuation or caps at all. Would have read stronger to me with none.
Thanks for sharing and good luck with it.
Paul