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[Wjames]

All three I think (drawing/coluring can be a type of playing too), Billy. Definitely agree about "Once", I'll make the change. I do like that dust/clouds line break as well, thanks for your thoughts.

Thanks for reading Cousin, I do think "scraggly" could be improved, the frayed twine I think says the same thing in a simpler, better way anyways.

I was worried the ending might be a little abrupt, but I also like it that way, it sort of seems to me like a memory fragment or something, so I'm glad you guys think it works.