Catch and Release

[kakashi1090]

Thanks for your thoughts guys, I'm a little stuck with this one at the moment. I know I need to add to it, right now it's basically just the very bones of the fishing/war metaphor, but I can't think of anything that fits.

Hey, when in doubt, free association. Just spew ideas out.

The struggle of catching a fish akin to the struggle of the battlefield
The contrast of a peaceful fishing trip and the harsh reality of war


Or build on literal things and make them dually a metaphor

Dads tackle box
was a metal first aid kit

Then say how. Maybe the tackle box brought him peace and healed his mental wounds (cliche yeah whatever word choice can fix that you get the idea lol)

Or see where your story is and progress it. Right now we have a pretty good backstory for what happened to the character and the setting for where and what he is doing.

Also, if you find yourself stuck try to remember or create an intention for the reader. When someone reads it, what is the intention? Why should they read it, what do they get out of it, how can you supply that?

If all else fails, write a different poem and just come back to this later. Creativity tends to have a mind of its own sometimes.

Don't be afraid to try something and post it here. At worst you'll get someone saying it's terrible and someone else to say "maybe this". Good luck to it! I am eager to see more!