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[Grace]

This is brilliant, Todd! The edgy, biting tone to a fairy-tale theme makes it a joy to read aloud. I thought I'd have a go at adding a few thoughts, if you don't mind. Thanks for the read. Grace.

My childhood lay behind me
in this trail of torn bread
I could no longer retrace.
 
We always ate enough
to remain hungry, our stomachs
waning like the sliver of moon-I like this
that sparkled through the branches
of this darkling forest. - sparkled goes well with darkling
 
Even when I saw the food
on her table, I kept gnawing
on the shingle like - Id want the line break after shingle, so like goes to the next line.
a little mouse, little mouse.
 
I still carry the finger bone
I once pressed into her hand
each night, while licking the plates clean.
 
The hunger had crossed the threshold with me,
and remained even 
as her fat melted in the oven. -suggestion is to break after remained.
 
We came back older than our parents
with gems that shone like in the fairy tale
of the girl who had them fall from her mouth
like so many ripe cherries. -not sure about the second like here. Maybe change to 'as'?
 
I chewed my words until they broke
my teeth, and laid heavy in my stomach
like forest stones.
I no longer needed a path back
for I never left that cottage. - great ending!