08-08-2015, 10:41 AM
I would have to agree with 43. on this one
the content honestly makes me resent the poem and the genre it falls in
it doesn't feel personal, and what you're trying to write about- love -IS COMPLETELY personal
you need to hone your language to make us feel something
I would suggest running with one of the threads of theme you have already, maybe something elemental like the tornado, or the idea of being "tangled"
the content honestly makes me resent the poem and the genre it falls in
it doesn't feel personal, and what you're trying to write about- love -IS COMPLETELY personal
you need to hone your language to make us feel something
I would suggest running with one of the threads of theme you have already, maybe something elemental like the tornado, or the idea of being "tangled"