No Eyes to The Abyssal Zone

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No Eyes to The Abyssal Zone.

Monday knights fight Tuesday[']s never-ending; they i think it would make more sense if it were 'Monday's knights'-- also, ending the line on 'they' makes no sense.
run strafing runs down submerged residential blocks if you removed 'strafing' (get what you're trying to say, but it doesn't quite go with 'runs') it'd just be 'run runs' which isn't really great. maybe  i like 'submerged residential blocks' though; good imagery.
in the middle of the night. And the sun never rises; would 'the midnight' be better than 'the middle of the night'?
they’re in a fish-tank looking at the surface. who's they? the knights? bit vague, but lovely image.

And the rafters on the surface look like eclipses, and
the man-o-war and manatee birds no comma needed without wing-[beats]
beats, just contrast leviathans casually sliding get what you're trying to say but it's wordy and convoluted here.
their way off into the humming blue crush.  uh, what just happened in this stanza?-- and, do you mean hummingbird blue crush?--either way, the adjectives don't make sense.

And an unremarkable Sunday snowset rises from is unremarkable really necessary?
the sea floor, all while naïve skin flakes naive really does not fit skin flakes. but it's interesting to say the least.
float down to feed all the bottom-scummer personal nitpick: should it be bottom scum?
weakdays that slither on the plastic pebbles; is that a pun i sense?--personally, i don't like puns in serious poetry. otherwise, i like this line. original and non-cliché, although confusing.

there,   if they dug beneath the rocks,  they’d find the sand had turned to glass. why the spaces? i don't mind, but it seems an odd choice.

i like.

it could use some cleaning up and rearranging of sentence structure (as you probably know and as every poem does) and clarification of the ideas raised. you mention knights in the first stanza, fish tanks and odd creatures (without wing-beats, mind you ) in the second, and then the sea in the third. the common thread sort-of tying them together is the mentioning of the weekdays, which i don't fully understand. i think you have some lovely imagery going on (first two lines of the third stanza i particularly like), and the title seems to be referring the bottom of the sea-- so where do the knights come into play?

even so, i think this is good, confusing for not. makes for a fun read. good luck for your next edit (if you intend to do so).

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