08-08-2015, 08:42 AM
Reading through some of the comments after reading the poem, I find myself agreeing with a little of what "Summermoose" had to say
The imagery used to describe the grandfather's skin is very strong, but then it becomes a bit of a let down to see that such strong imagery does not continue into the rest of the poem
I would also suggest tightening your rhyme scheme a bit
Otherwise, good stuff, I enjoyed!
The imagery used to describe the grandfather's skin is very strong, but then it becomes a bit of a let down to see that such strong imagery does not continue into the rest of the poem
I would also suggest tightening your rhyme scheme a bit
Otherwise, good stuff, I enjoyed!