Good Person

[Tigonfre]

Hello Tigonfre-

A monologue by the devil, eh?   Unless you'd have said so, that fact would not have struck me.  

Another approach is required.  First person is OK, and angling for "sympathy for the devil" is OK too.  I think that Mick's much more direct treatment is also more effective.  

Tighten this one down, and don't be so obscure that you need to then tell readers after the fact what the poem is about:  that is not a luxury afforded outside this forum.  

And yes, I did get the SON at the end line.  But I'm afraid that only confused this reader even more, because I did NOT take it to mean LUCIFER, the fallen angel.  So, you spend a lot of words leading up to an obscure ending.  That can be deadly, my friend.

... Mark

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...I got SOON. Huh?

Thanks Mark. I thought it was obvious, with that creepy line where he asks everyone to "join us". Also the (killers) in brackets and the speech degrading into weird, out of context words. Then the direct speech passage mentioning someone that has risen from his grave after three days to "save them", followed by more direct speech repeating the mantra, but with the word "soon" in it, as in "it is almost time".
I'll try to change it into a third person poem, but I've already written such a poem with a similar meaning. This one will have to go into the "Metamorphosis file".

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What does the word "killers" signify? Just curious.

The paradox of being both considerate ("good person property") and a killer ("bad person property") I wanted to point out how some "bad people" like killers have good traits as well, and are actually just as good as most others.