Beasts of Burden

[Animal Riots Activist]

Thanks to all the critics, this piece has been in dire need of editing for a long time. I shelved it a while back, seeing potential but always cringing in the back of my head every time I came across it. I like it quite a bit more now, but I also still welcome feedback.

EDIT #3
I'll avoid the grammar in this because it seems like it's been covered by others

They've taken to vast oceans -a tad redundant: Ocean implies vastness
and are owners of stolen hearts. -Stolen hearts is essentially devoid of any image or meaning for me and quite cliche.
They are men afraid of fear, forsaken
steel beasts of burden -This confuses me, are they pirates? Capitalists? Trains?
who hail a god of homogeneity
with silver teeth, and hating blood. These just further confuse me; this poem is so generalized I can't really get much from it.

With new homes
in old lands, -Seems like we're talking about america now?
their cause was written, and justified.
They spoke with broken fingers and
avoided what was left behind. -yep pretty much vaguely sounds like america

We watched quietly, wept, -Hold up. Now who is the we?
waved our hands in peace.
Then saved ourselves from that
burden,
their beast, -I like this set of three lines (this and the two preceding). It would be quite effective if I had the slightest idea (in specific terms) what is going on.
and faded while waiting patiently
to see the cycle repeat.

This poem doesn't give an inch! It is completely cloaked in vagueness and generalization, which makes it inaccessible to me.
-Em