The Bottomless Pit - Rev. #1

[Quixilated]

John,
I've read this over several times, and every time it makes me smile. I've had many a run in with all kinds of greedy animals: seagulls, too fat dogs, too fat cats, an army of crazed squirrels that killed my bird feeder dreams, and I think you captured the idea perfectly.
The only thing I might change would be some of the line breaks. This reads almost conversationally, and when I read it I found myself wishing to not have a pause in one or two places. I'll indicate where, and if you had a reason for the break, then by all means leave it.
Great job on another one!
--Quix

The Bottomless Pit

Go away, you greedy sod.
And don't look at me like that
as if I'm in debt to you and your brood.
Let me enjoy my fish and chips *wish "in peace" was on this line*
in peace, and savour the harbour and the boats.
And you, mate. Bog off.
Go and bother some other sop on holiday
with their faces full of burgers and cream- *I don't know what cream tea is, so maybe I'm missing something, but don't see a reason for tea to be all the way down there.*
teas. Plenty there for the likes of you.
Sodding beggars. Never happy. Always scrounging.
Our fault, I suppose.
Rods for our own backs
giving in to pitiful looks. You wouldn't be scrounging *this sentence starting at "You ..." would sound easier on its own line.*
if you weren't hungry.
But you're not.

Bastard seagulls.