Darkness

[peacejazzspirit]

Darkness
is a gift from
those who live their whole lives
not seeing the light that enters
our eyes.

I like the idea of this poem quite alot, I think you could maybe trim it down or reword a word here and there.

ex)
Darkness
is a gift.
Those who live their whole lives
never seeing the light that enters
our eyes.

Really cool sentence with a superb idea behind it, thanks for the post!

Thanks so much Bunx! I like your idea, but then again it would break the form. Maybe:

Darkness;
a gift bestowed
upon us by those to
never see the light that enters
our eyes.