07-28-2015, 05:08 PM
Hi, 43,
As you wrote this whilst 80% asleep, that's perhaps why I can't make head nor tail of it. I can't/won't read something into it for the sake of it, or because it's expected.
Did you analyse and redraft in the cold light of day, or was it posted hot from the mind?
I'm trying to understand free verse - and it worries me when you comment is this even worth salvaging?
I'm keen to learn through constructive criticism. Help me out here.
As you wrote this whilst 80% asleep, that's perhaps why I can't make head nor tail of it. I can't/won't read something into it for the sake of it, or because it's expected.
Did you analyse and redraft in the cold light of day, or was it posted hot from the mind?
I'm trying to understand free verse - and it worries me when you comment is this even worth salvaging?
I'm keen to learn through constructive criticism. Help me out here.
A poet who can't make the language sing doesn't start. Hence the shortage of real poems amongst the global planktonic field of duds. - Clive James.