Southerly

[Mark A Becker]

Hello again-

Something was bugging me about the wording and I think that I've found it;

pure edge and hardness
whet to sting fiercely
as the isolation
that formed it,
and bristling,

"whet" (sharpen) and "bristling" (stiff and spiky) do not carry over the tone.  Another word for "bristling" is needed, I think.  Perhaps "sharpened" instead of "formed", and then leave out "and bristling'.  

pure edge and hardness
whet to sting fiercely
as the isolation
that sharpened it.  
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