07-28-2015, 09:05 AM
Tearing works! 
Also, tried to make up my mind about the past and present tense quesstion. If you change it, make it all present not all past, would give it a more active feel. Somehow the change between the two that you have now makes the present tense stanza stand out, it seems more vivid somehow. If you want to spotlight it, then keep it as is.
Also, tried to make up my mind about the past and present tense quesstion. If you change it, make it all present not all past, would give it a more active feel. Somehow the change between the two that you have now makes the present tense stanza stand out, it seems more vivid somehow. If you want to spotlight it, then keep it as is.
The Soufflé isn’t the soufflé; the soufflé is the recipe. --Clara