The Unforgiving Wind

[Grace]

The Unforgiving Wind

A stiff and unforgiving wind,
blew through the meadow with a roar.
And swept the earth beneath it’s feet
while tumbling through the greenery.

I stand erect, intent on grit.
To face the unforgiving wind.
It’s force cannot have hold on me,
I will not yield, I will not yield.

The wind however did not cease,
and gradually it weakened me.
Reluctantly, I have to quit.
My body simply must submit.

And get swept by the unforgiving wind.

I think this is really good. I was wondering about the tense changes? Maybe  the present tense is intended to be for the speaker's engagement with the wind and the past tense for describing it. This is just me (take with a pinch of salt), but Id prefer the  whole thing in present tense, or perhaps the narrator's thoughts in italics?  Unforgiving is a brilliant word choice to put with wind.  It gives a personality to a force of nature and  turns it into a metaphor. Thank you for the read of this. Grace