07-27-2015, 05:01 PM
Overall, this poem is quite ambiguous, though you seem to have a nice grasp on imagery. As others have said, some images here are quite well conveyed. However, some are too abstract, and leave in my opinion too much open to the reader. Overall though, the imagery is good.
However I feel like the rhyme feels a little forced, as well the theme of the poem feels a tad thin. Love poems are hard to keep topical and non-trite, but still your poem feels like something I've read before. Imagery is great, but a true provocative theme is what sparks attention and interest.
However I feel like the rhyme feels a little forced, as well the theme of the poem feels a tad thin. Love poems are hard to keep topical and non-trite, but still your poem feels like something I've read before. Imagery is great, but a true provocative theme is what sparks attention and interest.