Percussion

[Wjames]

Hey Wj-

I like the sing song feel of this piece, which is in line with the content (reading a children's book).

Just a suggestion, below:

I sat on the deck, rocking my chair
to the rhythm of the rhymes
in a children's book.

Rain fell on the metal roof,
backing the lines with a steady beat,
like a laid back snare.

Thanks for your thoughts Mark, I do prefer your first stanza, but I like the second stanza more the way it is.

I will likely change the first stanza to the way you have it, and then try and think of a new word for rhymes in the second stanza.