The Mandolin

[Animal Riots Activist]

Rip it apart Much obliged!

The Mandolin

Made for the monster -unless capitalizing the first word of every line serves a specific function, just capitalize like you would a sentence.
Played by the pauper
Aged by the sage
Loved by the lunatic
-it's neck broken by the bastard. -I really enjoy this first stanza. You might consider omitting '-it's neck' to keep the parallel structure around throughout the whole stanza. Oh and if you decided to keep 'it's neck', omit the apostrophe at least  

Played before kings,
Sang shivers and dreams, -I like the idea of singing shivers, but singing dreams falls short here. It's a bit of an abstraction, whereas shivers is a rather concrete image
Was a woman
a lover
a poet
a thing... not sure how ellipsis are functioning here. Are they akin to an etc, or a pause in a dialogue? If you cant say, I would cut them.

Now she waits mounted i like the idea of the mandolin being a woman, you should bring it back here. also makes a perhaps (un)wanted double entendre
on a poor man's wall,
For a master to recall: -I think this rhyme doesn't function very well. maybe recollect/remember/revive instead of recall?
the hidden,
the mystery,
the music-
its all in all. -this final line makes the reader struggle a bit, which I think is great!

Really solid work here. The only thing I failed to address above is the sets of 3 in the final 2 stanzas. I think they can very easily be said to be cliche or gimmicky, but I think they function rather well here as they are contextualized by the first stanza quite nicely. Just something to consider. Other than the first line capitalization and grammar (you should keep your poem correctly punctuated and capitalized), really just minor edits needed here. Unlike others, I enjoy the romanticization in this poem, as I think its consistent and not overwrought.

All the best,
Em