Masturbation

Masturbation - Edit

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07-18-2015, 03:58 AM

I've made a little edit to this one, I think it tidies up a few of its problems. I took Dale's suggestion for the last lines, and also got rid of "smell" which I think didn't really fit very well (as Tectak pointed out). Also made a couple other small changes.

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Masturbation - Edit - by Wjames - 06-06-2015, 11:57 AM

RE: Masturbation - by Erthona - 06-06-2015, 02:02 PM

RE: Masturbation - by tectak - 06-06-2015, 08:50 PM

RE: Masturbation - by poppoetry - 06-06-2015, 11:07 PM

RE: Masturbation - by i.might.be.a.bit.sad - 06-06-2015, 11:54 PM

RE: Masturbation - by Wjames - 06-08-2015, 06:25 AM

RE: Masturbation - by billy - 06-08-2015, 05:48 PM

RE: Masturbation - Edit - by Wjames - 07-18-2015, 03:58 AM

RE: Masturbation - Edit - by ellajam - 07-18-2015, 05:12 AM

RE: Masturbation - Edit - by Wjames - 07-22-2015, 05:08 AM

RE: Masturbation - Edit - by tectak - 07-29-2015, 07:17 AM

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