Water Colour

[billy]

in general it feels pretty weak but for some reason i really do like it, maybe because it reads, like a watercolour painting looks. i would have really enjoyed you opening up the poem but it is a good soft image to think about. [line 3 looks like she's giving you a wank but that could just be my dirty mind ]

We watched the sunset bleed above the lake. lovely image.
You painted its double in the water;
your strokes somehow softer than the touch of your lips.
When you were done, your cheeks were redder than the sky;
I laughed, and followed you into the lake.