Their Thoughts
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(06-18-2015, 11:04 PM)Mr. Creosote Wrote:  Their Thoughts
My thoughts belong to others
I own only a subscription have instead of own?
My head reproduces the past
I whisper footnotes after I speak footnotes whispered?
The great men of the past speak through me
I try to hide from them why do I try to hide from them?
They are leather bound black and white ghosts
They haunt my writing
those are the only three alterations I did in my head when I read it. I do like the ideas in the poem, not 100% sure on the meter though.I would say I love the last two lines as they are, but both start with "they" not sure of a replacement to use.
I'm slightly mad and completely obsessed with language

Please forgive my spelling and punctuationBeg
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Their Thoughts - by Mr. Creosote - 06-18-2015, 11:04 PM
RE: Their Thoughts - by FindingJune - 06-18-2015, 11:33 PM
RE: Their Thoughts - by Magpie - 06-18-2015, 11:46 PM
RE: Their Thoughts - by hopefularahant - 06-19-2015, 10:51 AM
RE: Their Thoughts - by nightKnight - 06-29-2015, 08:25 AM
RE: Their Thoughts - by jams01752 - 07-04-2015, 01:31 AM
RE: Their Thoughts - by Vastile - 07-09-2015, 06:03 PM
RE: Their Thoughts - by TheOnlyRedSmurf - 07-09-2015, 08:34 PM



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