Fond of You

[danny_]

Thank you fluorescent.43, and thank you tectak. You were both helpful.
Agreed with many points and not as much with a few. I've posted a first edit. Probably too soon, I feel the whole dream growing each time I go back, and it's probably not done. It probably stinks, but I'll get there eventually. I had more I wanted to say but ran into trouble because this is written in present tense and I accidentally switched to past tense, had to cut it because I couldn't make them work together. Besides that the ending isn't very impacting, just kinda logical. It's been fun, though.

But what are unsalted "parting bangs"?
best,
tectak

Maybe you can help, tectak. I thought it was obvious but perhaps only because I grew up on the beach. Bangs are hair around the forehead cut short, right? Search google for "short bangs". And they are able to be parted or separated by the wind if they are not stuck with dried salt - this happens after swimming in the ocean, the salt is actually visible on the skin and sometimes hair will be stuck together with it. In her case stuck to her face or skin. The wind can only move hair that is not stuck and neither still wet, but only the dried part.

I'll definitely consider if this could be conveyed more clearly in the poem.
Thanks again