07-04-2015, 07:48 AM
Thank you fluorescent.43, and thank you tectak. You were both helpful.
Agreed with many points and not as much with a few. I've posted a first edit. Probably too soon, I feel the whole dream growing each time I go back, and it's probably not done. It probably stinks, but I'll get there eventually. I had more I wanted to say but ran into trouble because this is written in present tense and I accidentally switched to past tense, had to cut it because I couldn't make them work together. Besides that the ending isn't very impacting, just kinda logical. It's been fun, though.
Agreed with many points and not as much with a few. I've posted a first edit. Probably too soon, I feel the whole dream growing each time I go back, and it's probably not done. It probably stinks, but I'll get there eventually. I had more I wanted to say but ran into trouble because this is written in present tense and I accidentally switched to past tense, had to cut it because I couldn't make them work together. Besides that the ending isn't very impacting, just kinda logical. It's been fun, though.
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