07-03-2015, 12:52 PM
Not really a A Fibonacci Poem, not that I have a problem with that as a A Fibonacci Poem is purely an externally imposed form that has nothing to do with poetry. Maybe call it a "Double Fibonacci Poem inversion concrete". Generally such an investment tends to cause one to overlook the content and it does so for me here, the main thesis of which is the repeated forms in nature, specifically in this case the spiral which is imaged through the concrete aspect of the poem. Although I agree with what Tom said, I think the analyses is a bit hard for such a light hearted observation, that is to say I do not think this poem is pretentious enough to be judged by such a high standard. So for what it is, I find no major flaws in it.
Dale
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.