07-03-2015, 01:47 AM
Hi Mark,
I appreciate what you have done here in the sense of experimenting with a different kind of form. I'm all for experimenting with form unless the necessity to stick with certain rules detracts from any poetic qualities within.
At first I was puzzled by the isolated words on their own line at the beginning and end of each stanza but I get it now, it's the series in question. And in this restriction is the first problem in many ways because any poem that has a first three line syllable structure of 1-1-2 is going to be hard to pull off.
I understand the fascination with experimenting with different forms and I myself am more than guilty of wandering down those long lonely corridors only to find at the end a creation that is briefly mathematically and intellectually appealing but also without any poetic qualities.
If you've never investigated palindrome poems then don't go there, along with LSD it is easiest way to lose your mind completely. I'm presuming there is also such a thing as a π (that's supposed to be the symbol for pi) poem, I just checked and there is. I forbid you to look it up we might lose you forever, you need to stay sane for the sake of this site.
I would have thought that if ever a poem could be truly justified in being centre justified this would be it. However I also appreciate that to centre justify a poem on this site turns it from a poem into a suicide note.
I stress again that I do really appreciate the adventure and experimentation that you are willing to take, just don't lose sight of the bigger picture.
Cheers for the read,
Mark
ps - Fibonacci? Did he used to play left back for Juventus?
I appreciate what you have done here in the sense of experimenting with a different kind of form. I'm all for experimenting with form unless the necessity to stick with certain rules detracts from any poetic qualities within.
At first I was puzzled by the isolated words on their own line at the beginning and end of each stanza but I get it now, it's the series in question. And in this restriction is the first problem in many ways because any poem that has a first three line syllable structure of 1-1-2 is going to be hard to pull off.
I understand the fascination with experimenting with different forms and I myself am more than guilty of wandering down those long lonely corridors only to find at the end a creation that is briefly mathematically and intellectually appealing but also without any poetic qualities.
If you've never investigated palindrome poems then don't go there, along with LSD it is easiest way to lose your mind completely. I'm presuming there is also such a thing as a π (that's supposed to be the symbol for pi) poem, I just checked and there is. I forbid you to look it up we might lose you forever, you need to stay sane for the sake of this site.
I would have thought that if ever a poem could be truly justified in being centre justified this would be it. However I also appreciate that to centre justify a poem on this site turns it from a poem into a suicide note.
I stress again that I do really appreciate the adventure and experimentation that you are willing to take, just don't lose sight of the bigger picture.
Cheers for the read,
Mark
ps - Fibonacci? Did he used to play left back for Juventus?
wae aye man ye radgie