Like a Dog (REV 4)

[Mark A Becker]

Hi Danny-
Thanks for your comments and suggestions.
 
I've re-worked this into a third rev, and tried to eliminate much of the "telling".

You are correct, I didn't like "disguised by shadows" either, and it is gone.

I re-made the end so I could even attempt to convey what I witnessed as my sister neared the end.  (A note here:  I was actually with her when she died, but can only imagine the horror of the many folks that have gone through this utterly alone).

I also re-made the very end, as I thought it was too bland, as well.

My sister wanted to be "put down" surrounded by family, but the law does not allow it.  Fortunately, that law does not apply to dogs, and I'm hoping to draw that contrast here.

Thanks again for the close read,
... Mark

ps- I never know what to do with the first, "fire-hose" versions, and they usually wind up trashed.