Water Colour

[Alexearth]

We watched the sunset bleed above the lake. A sunset that bleeds... Why not: "We watched the sun bleed over the lake" (For some reason I would say - "over" the lake - )
You painted its double in the water; I would write "You painted "a" double"
your strokes somehow softer than the touch of your lips. Is "somehow" necessary?


When you were done, your cheeks were redder than the sky;
I laughed, and followed you into the lake. Love the ending. I would maybe only leave: "And I followed you into the lake."

Hey Wjames, just some suggestions! I like short yet strong poems like these, though when writing I prefer not using the "You" and "I" form. 
Love the evening feel and the colors.

Cheers,


Alex