Like a Dog (REV 4)

[Mark A Becker]

Thanks Tom,
I'm not sure what you mean by 'come clean' unless you're referring to how I got from point 'A' (the much longer version) to point 'B' (the shorter one). I was inspired by a poem by mercedes, opened up the fire hose with the first version, and then went back to see what stuck. Using that process, I usually wind up at a very different place from where I started. That's about as "clean" as I can come.

YES: In REV 2, I abandon the general and tighten down to 'some' dogs, for the very reasons you pointed out.

Also YES- even in the US of A, 'dying like a dog' is not something good. In REV 2, I aim too soften that, by indicating that my sister's wish was specific to 'her dog'.

I also appreciate the comment regarding length of lines, and will need to figure out how to apply that to my style.

All that said, this is a very tough one to complete.

Thanks again for reading and commenting,
....Mark