Evolution

[tectak]

Hey Tom,

The rhyming is not forced, and thus, it reads quite well.

The occasional anapests do have a way of creating that "marching feeling".  That said, that not out of line with the title.

The spondees are prevalent, and add a forcefulness that this piece almost requires.  

This one is so close to done that there is not much to pick apart, without being too "nitty".

So, I see what you mean when you say that it's filler...

Very good read,
... Mark

Hi mark,
thanks for this...I eat all crit even if it tastes nice
A few changes have been made but I feel that I lose impact with the payoff...the rhyme came too easily.
Best,
tectak