06-30-2015, 05:43 AM
Hey Tom,
The rhyming is not forced, and thus, it reads quite well.
The occasional anapests do have a way of creating that "marching feeling". That said, that not out of line with the title.
The spondees are prevalent, and add a forcefulness that this piece almost requires.
This one is so close to done that there is not much to pick apart, without being too "nitty".
So, I see what you mean when you say that it's filler...
Very good read,
... Mark
The rhyming is not forced, and thus, it reads quite well.
The occasional anapests do have a way of creating that "marching feeling". That said, that not out of line with the title.
The spondees are prevalent, and add a forcefulness that this piece almost requires.
This one is so close to done that there is not much to pick apart, without being too "nitty".
So, I see what you mean when you say that it's filler...
Very good read,
... Mark