Eli Eli lama sabachthani

[Todd]

Hi nightKnight,


Welcome to the site! Let me give you a few comments on your poem for your consideration.

Eli Eli lama sabachthani--Minor issues with the title. I think the Psalm 22/words on the cross allusion are a bit problematic. The tone of statement lends itself to despair, disillusionment, the problem I have is the speaker is already resigned to the state they find themselves in. This is no journey; we are alreaady at the destination when the poem starts. We are simply moving through a recalled path. 
I've had issues with Father since I was six.
Bored while I'm shown temples, churches and Abbeys,
The lessons I was given made me wish for The Styx,
But instead all I got was the stick.

I'm wrong. An abomination. A shame.
Whilst I am lazy, lazy and ill formed,--Your third line here is interesting. What needs work is that you tend to list out descriptors, but descriptors alone are a bit too abstract and carry little emotive power. Perhaps go for a more tightly written specific issue(s)
My Father in his heydays fed all, fixed all and even healed the lame

But I don't see him much any more.
I ask around. Even those who loved him--This sort of tone of voice sounds good.
Are losing faith in the image they once saw.
I can't say I miss him. Everything was wrong, a Sin.
Noise on a Sunday? Sin. Dancing? Sin. Tattoo? Sin.--Again less list go a bit deeper.

Unfortunately I hear about him on the news.
Causing havoc, leading people down dark paths--Phrasing like "causing havoc" is too general.
Gathering more friends, a powder keg with a short fuse.

I think Father died a while ago.--If you end on Nietzsche this is expressed too early and steals the final moment.
Starvation, rape and murder--Another list, go deeper
Body upon body attracting the worm and the crow
Each war, famine and plague pushing him further.
And he distanced himself farther.--doesn't add much from the previous line

All that is left is a husk, for demons to puppet,
Leaving us with an infection to fight.
I think possibly Nietzsche was right.

Just some thoughts to consider. Its a topic that can be developed. I think you just need to move one or two layers deeper. I hope some of that helps.

Best,

Todd