06-29-2015, 08:25 AM
I like what the poem is representing, I'm assuming it's about being influenced by what you read.
I think though that it needs developing, some of the lines seem out of place:
I do like the poem though, i like the idea behind it.
I think though that it needs developing, some of the lines seem out of place:
Quote:My head reproduces the pastin particular doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. This line implies that your thoughts are stuck going over a troublesome memory, not that your mind is lost in the avenues of history. Also maybe consider using a different word to reproduces, it doesn't quite fit right, i would go for 'recreates' or something along those lines.
I do like the poem though, i like the idea behind it.
