06-28-2015, 06:09 AM
Hi QC,
The title is a clever one and fits really well. when I read the poem I am reading a father daughter relationship post his death, and being reflected on by the daughter, in that respect it reads quite dark and the extended metaphor of the spider and snakes seems to set the tone, I like the end lines and my only nit would be to have a look at the punctuation it could do with a tidy. Best Keith
The title is a clever one and fits really well. when I read the poem I am reading a father daughter relationship post his death, and being reflected on by the daughter, in that respect it reads quite dark and the extended metaphor of the spider and snakes seems to set the tone, I like the end lines and my only nit would be to have a look at the punctuation it could do with a tidy. Best Keith
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