06-27-2015, 03:41 AM
Works for me.
"jay bird" should be changed to "jaybird" (the latter spelling's about 95% prevalent).
Welcome to the Pen,
Ray
P.S. 5-7-5 is an urban myth, school kid stuff. Serious English Haiku writers abandoned
it around 1923. Modern translators such as Blyth, Aitken, Hass (my favorite) say it's
impossible to accurately translate the emotive effect of the original Japanese haiku
using 5-7-5. Their English syllable count is usually around 8 to 12. (Not that you can't
write 5-7-5, but it's probably better not to call it haiku.)
P.P.S. Robert Hass' book of his translations:
"The Essential Haiku: Versions of Basho, Buson, & Issa"
is an excellent guide to how to go about haiku.
(If you're gonna learn haiku, why not learn from the masters?)
A used paperback in like-new condition can be had,
including shipping, for about $7 U.S. over on Amazon.com
"jay bird" should be changed to "jaybird" (the latter spelling's about 95% prevalent).
Welcome to the Pen,
Ray
P.S. 5-7-5 is an urban myth, school kid stuff. Serious English Haiku writers abandoned
it around 1923. Modern translators such as Blyth, Aitken, Hass (my favorite) say it's
impossible to accurately translate the emotive effect of the original Japanese haiku
using 5-7-5. Their English syllable count is usually around 8 to 12. (Not that you can't
write 5-7-5, but it's probably better not to call it haiku.)
P.P.S. Robert Hass' book of his translations:
"The Essential Haiku: Versions of Basho, Buson, & Issa"
is an excellent guide to how to go about haiku.
(If you're gonna learn haiku, why not learn from the masters?)
A used paperback in like-new condition can be had,
including shipping, for about $7 U.S. over on Amazon.com
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